Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in their exams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the education field, many
students
try to do their best in
studies
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. It is argued by
few
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people that
children
who get the topmost grades in their academics should be awarded.
However
, there are others who believe that
students
who show better results are the ones that should be recognized. In my opinion, the latter should be given more emphasis so that they continue to progress in future. On the one hand, some community ascertains that toppers are the ones who work hard to study. It seems that because these
children
are always driven to be
at
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the number one position, they should be given medals or certificates for their hard work.
For instance
, a child who ranks
first
in class dedicates his entire time to
studies
in order to achieve that result. I totally disagree with
this
view because an intelligent boy or a girl always finds it easy to understand the concepts of learning. These
children
manage to achieve
first
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rank because of their diligent nature and smart thinking whereas other
students
find it very difficult.
On the other hand
, a child who performs better than his or her previous results should be appreciated in order to encourage them. Even
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these
students
do not achieve higher scores, they must be rewarded because performing better than before is harder for them.
Furthermore
, they will feel motivated and they will try to keep progressing in their academic
studies
.
For instance
, the schools in London organise an annual award function for
students
who show good progress in their class and it is said that because these
children
are rewarded, they not only excel at academics but
also
in their career. In short, a little motivation and push can help them achieve good results. To conclude, I believe that
students
who struggle with their
studies
should be appreciated.
Although
the hard work of the student who tops must
also
be recognised, we must always push the ones who show great developments to keep them going. By doing so, not only the topper but
also
the average or poor
students
will feel a sense of encouragement to perform well in
studies
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