Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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sales
. But others think
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an old type of
way
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sales
since it is so common. Around the
world
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most big
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for their
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also
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various ways to keep the
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of population . Due to these factors , I
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advertising is an
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successful
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sales
.
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, when we consider
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, some
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due to the
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number of
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today. But ,when we
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speaking , still most
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rely on
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commercials
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for there
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items. Advertising
companies
using
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like using celebrities to keep the public attention.
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that ,
people
are still
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various types of
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hand , most
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of money on advertising and
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the most
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of that. many studies which had done around the
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,
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,
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that , most
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around the globe buying most popular band names and advertising has a major effect on
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about the effect of
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sales
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world
have
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that advertising is a good mode to improve
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