Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

is not only a tool for communication
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the cornerstone of culture. Due to globalization, many local dialects are in
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danger of extinction. It is essential that governments step in to save these priceless gems of culture from being erased from society. Despite reservations from some quarters, I believe that academia and administration should collaborate to save the
and meticulously document
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. In the following paragraphs, I will examine the situation and buttress with necessary examples. A diversity of
and cultures is the hallmark of mature civilizations. All great civilizations like the ancient Indians, Mesopotamians, Egyptians - all encouraged diverse
and traditions. Later, narrow-minded imperialists and fanatics put an end to
by enforcing their
of choice.
For instance
, the Han majority in China trampled upon the Tibetans to end their
and culture. All these local
have priceless wisdom and history entombed in them, and
, these need to be preserved and fostered. Many in
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academia have realized
and are toiling hard to restore the local
, some people obstinately try to impose a single
in the name of globalization and cultural imperialism and the attendant loss is huge.
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, because the native Red Indians preserved their sign
, the US Army could use their tongue to design an unbreakable code
. Had it been lost, it would have
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the US Army. In conclusion, we have examined the need for local
to be preserved and the unnecessary opposition to it. I hereby humbly recommend the necessity for preserving local dialects and hope for a better future.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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