Parents often buy their children many toys. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children having a large number of toys?
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lasts
two or three decades the way that parents Add a comma
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caring
and attention to Wrong verb form
care
fulfill
their Wrong verb form
fulfilling
children
needs Use synonyms
has
changed dramatically. Change the verb form
have
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discuss some of the reasons why Change the capitalization
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children
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with
several Change preposition
by
kind
of amusements and some of the adverse Change to a plural noun
kinds
impact
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they
raising
.
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phenomena
. Kids spend Fix the agreement mistake
phenomenon
large
and considerable proportion of their time Add an article
a large
by
playing with Change preposition
apply
toys
either alone or by making connections with their peers. by no means Use synonyms
its
parents supply all their offspring needs which Add a missing verb
does its
toys
are part of them. A recent study by Use synonyms
Unisef
over the past ten years have found that those people from young group age who have played with different types of Correct your spelling
Unicef
toys
as logo were twice as less likely to face stressful challenges later with others and have greatly developed range of skills.Use synonyms
in addition
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for example
some girls try to play a role of a doctor and Linking Words
wearing
her dress, Wrong verb form
wear
thus
she can have better Linking Words
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comes
true.
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come
toys
for Use synonyms
children
could be harmful in many ways, Use synonyms
first
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with
playing involves seating still with no movements, it can Change preposition
apply
leads
to Change the verb form
lead
sedentary
lifestyle that leads to health Add an article
a sedentary
the sedentary
issue
e.g. obesity. If kids participate in more active games like soccer, they would benefit from exercising and promote their physical and mental health. Fix the agreement mistake
issues
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children
’s demands are satisfied abruptly within seconds it can Use synonyms
has
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have
detrimental
effect on their character as they become Add an article
a detrimental
spoil
and assume that life should always get them what they want.
All things considered, purchasing all kinds of Wrong verb form
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toys
for Use synonyms
children
would be simultaneously advantageous and disadvantageous which depends on several including the kind of Use synonyms
toys
and the amount of time spent on them.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite