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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society others however, belive that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #belive #school #place
Human
society
 consists of individuals and human beings. In order to be a
community
 a safe,soothing and motivating
invironment
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environment
 for itʼs
members
 it needs good organs. Definition and description of
this good
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this good member
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members
 in different cultures are various but in summary,they are educated, hardworking,law-abiding And
collaborator
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collaborators
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. Who is in charge to create these
specitications
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specifications
 in people, is the question and there are
oposite
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opposite
 opinions, some
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believe
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belive
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believe
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parents
 while others assume
schools
, in
this
assey
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essay
assay
 will discuss both views.
First
 of
all
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parents
 are the reason and source of
children
ʼs birth so
as a result
 fathers and mothers are the
first
liables
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liable
 of
children
 to
society
. As it has been said in
introduction
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the introduction
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,
community
 needs people with decent features and in order to
creating
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 these particulars, there is a need for training from
parents
forthermore
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furthermore
,inherently and
outomatically
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automatically
parents
 are the
first
 and main model of their
children
 as well as the long
houres
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hours
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 that they are with
children
 have made a nice
apportunity
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opportunity
 for
children
’s training.
Finally
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 before it comes time for
children
 to go
school
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to school
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, the years that most experts
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 human personality is formed,
parents
 are one of the main
origin
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origins
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of information and sole teachers of
children
.
By contrast
, opponents of
this
view point
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viewpoint
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 out that the mainspring of developing
schools
 has been educating youth for answering the requests of their lives and the
socity
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society
 training of good
members
, could cause the progress of
whole
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the whole
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community
.
Additinally
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Additionally
 there are instructed teachers in school that with special and modern plans, train
children
 to be good and useful for their location. Another essential point is the principals of
schools
 with checking out the needs of the
community
in
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at
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 different times are changing the definition of a good member
for
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of
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society
 and it means
schools
 are
intelligent
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an intelligent
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place
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places
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 for educating
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the student
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student
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students
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 to be beneficial for their
community
. In
summary
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,summary
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 according to the results of both
views
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 it has
been seemed
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seemed
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schools
 are the more
appropiate
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appropriate
 organ to teach
children
 how to be good
members
 for
society
however
 the role of
parents
 can not be ignored.
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