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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcylces are banned from city center. People are encouraged to use public transports such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free day. To what extent do you think the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

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On vehicle-free days, citizens are motivated to practice public transportation, in order to reduce air pollution. There are certainly a plethora of benefits of using the
metro
 and buses. In my opinion, the usefulness of buses is way more than its drawbacks.
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 essay will elaborate on the same in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, using government facilities for commuting saves
time
.
In other words
, the
transport
 vehicles
such
 as
metro
, have incredibly high speed than that of a private car. A person can reach his job in a shorter span of
time
 by using a
metro
 train.
In addition
 to that, there is no need to search a parking place as far as public transportation is concerned. Resultantly an individual saves
time
.
For instance
, my cousin Karan
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 prefers to travel by
metro
 in 'New Delhi', which makes him reach the office 30 minutes earlier than the private car.
Secondly
, using public trans[port, helps individuals save cash. Usually, buses and metros are cheaper than private vehicles.
Moreover
, capital spent on own car can be saved, if a person is encouraged to use public bus. The
money
 saved can be utilized for emergency needs. To exemplify, my nephew Sunil, saves quite a handsome
money
 monthly, by using a bus for commuting. The saved
money
, he uses to pay his mess bills. The disadvantage of using public
transport
 is the lack of cleanliness and hygiene.
However
, people, with their appropriate behaviour
such
 as throwing garbage in waste bins and not in a bus could help enhance the hygiene in public transports. To illustrate, in my city Nashik, the clean city campaign run by local authorities made public
transport
 one of the cleanest
transport
 among all means of transportation. In conclusion, even though lack of cleanliness is an issue, which demotivates the use of public
transport
, there are ample benefits like saving
time
 and
money
, which are way more than the disadvantage. In my opinion, people should definitely use public
transport
 because of its advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • carbon footprint
  • urban environment
  • behavioural change
  • foot traffic
  • community engagement
  • implementation
  • enforcement
  • resistance
  • transition
  • convenience
  • sustainability
  • inconvenience
  • accessibility
  • mobility
  • alternative transport.
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