You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
Arguably, it is commented that the appropriate age to be engaged should be the minimum age of 21. Personally, I strongly disagree with the view since the overwhelming majority of individuals live in the democratic rule where Boys and Girls choose
their
right time to mate Change the word
the
Although
a tiny minority is influenced by these crazies
ideas. Change noun form
crazy's
crazies'
This
essay will shed light on both sides of the view and provide evidence to prove the arguments.
On the one hand, individuals have the right to choose their fate. In other words
, people are free to set their own lives, the
appropriate time to study and to engage. Correct word choice
and the
For instance
, 90% of European citizens vary significantly the moment they choose to be wife or husband, being well over 30 years old the
chosen period, it is pointed out by the new research carried out by the University of Exeter. Change preposition
during the
As a result
, no one goes under pressure due to
late marriage. Furthermore
, it is the overriding reason for the less compromised individuals in these locations.
On the other hand
, remote societies take seriously this
dizzy idea. Because of a shortfall of information as well as
social pressure, people from underprivileged communities become wives and husbands earlier, at the age of 21 or before. For example
, 40% of Africa
folk mate early Replace the word
African
due to
relatives' enforcement. Hence
, many Girls lose school escalating the number of illiterates. Moreover
, It is the prime reason for the local living to be out of schools
.
Fix the agreement mistake
school
To sum up
, notwithstanding the view to be valuable in some societies, this
is not the way out
to follow owing to the fact that human beings are free to decide about what is good and bad for them. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, I still strongly disagree with the statement.Submitted by vascomunguarepenete on
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task response
Ensure to address the prompt directly by expressing a clear opinion on whether the legal age to marry should be 21 or not.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay in a more structured manner. Include a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize your main points. Develop your ideas logically and cohesively throughout the essay.
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