Eighteen is the appropriate age for children to finish school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Eighteen is considered to be the right
age
for finishing school. In my opinion, I believe that it is not only an
approriate
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appropriate
age
but
also
the right
time
for many opportunities in both individual and the whole community scale.
First
of all, at the
age
of 18, several rights and responsibilities are entitled to youngsters.
For example
,
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of crimes and
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to get married
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allowed in some countries at 18. It is due to the fact that at 18, one can take care of himself without someone's care. The same rule should be applied
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education. Theories are taught well enough at the
age
of 18 and it is
time
to wander around the outside world and learn
real life
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lessons because to survive in the
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and developing world, life experiences matter the most nowadays.
Moreover
, unlike the past, today is the technology era so
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everything can be learned with the help of technology. And the technology will only
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better and bigger undoubtedly,so, one should not be worried
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missing out
knowledge
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. Another fact is that the life span of
human
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being
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is getting shorter than before,which means that, we do not have
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time
to spend at school. It is better to equip yourself with enough knowledge at 18 and apply those theories for the benefit of
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.
As a result
, the community will develop enormously since it is full of experienced young people.
Furthermore
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is
also
a long way to go if someone is eager to learn
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or doctoral degree in a related field. So, it is better to complete a graduate degree at 18. To sum up, permitting to complete the school lessons at 18 sounds convincing since it can bring several positive aspects to everyone. And youngsters should
also
try to be ready to explore the world at that
time
.
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