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I have the pleasure to write a letter of recommendation for
Novita
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 Sari to you. She was a student at the Departement of Accounting, Kwik Kian Gie School of Business (previously known as Institut Bisnis dan Informatika Indonesia). During my interactions with her in the classroom, I have observed that
Novita
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very
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 proactive and intelligent person as she often asked questions in a deeper way. I
also
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 supervise her for
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their Bachelor
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 Thesis with the title “Social Interpretation on Earnings Management”. She is very enthusiastic to study new things, proven when I challenge her to use
qualitative
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 method for her thesis, and with no hesitation, she accepted it. During mentoring, she is a strongly analytical-thinking person and
want
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 to accept insight for
the
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 better outcome. I have known her for being a passionate Lab Assistant that teaches Accounting both
in
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 Basic and Intermediate
level
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 for her junior students in
university
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in
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 her
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 semester until her final semester. Based on her junior’s testimony, I heard that she can easily
gets
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 along with her junior students and
very
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 attentive while teaching Accounting. She does not hesitate to explain the lesson again if her junior needs her explanation again.
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, she got accepted in
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 Tunas Muda Cendekia scholarship in her
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 2 years of study and is known for being a good scholar. Her academic records show that
Novita
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 has very good results and finished her study quicker (3.5 years) compared to the normal one (4 years). Based on these observations, I highly recommend that
Novita
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 Sari
to
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be accepted
at
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 a Master’s Degree program. I believe she will perform satisfactorily and successfully task
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given to her. Should you require additional information, please contact me through phone or email and I will be very happy to provide it.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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