Practice 2: Some people say that the government should spend more money taking care of elderly people while others think that government spending should be spent more on the education of young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Presently, with the advent of technology. We are seeing

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rise in the life span of seniors in society.

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is in turn increasing, the population of

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age population in the

community

and simultaneously their expenses. Some critics believe, law enforcers should spend a higher

amount

on educating the younger generation than on taking care of elders. In the below paragraph, we will discuss both sides and my balanced opinion.

Firstly

, senior citizens are the ones who have built

this

community

. They are the ones, who have paid taxes and ensured, society development is given priority. It is their vision and funds which have helped us to be ready for new challenges. In ,general they have paid tax, equal to 30% of their earnings.

Therefore

it is our responsibility, to ensure they are treated well. And, we spend a good

amount

on their wellbeing now.

On the other hand

, with changes in generation and requirements. It is of utmost priority we work on the development of younger ones in society since they form the pillars of culture and can overcome the new challenge in

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. With the expansion of the internet, the entire world is becoming a smaller place, the needs of teenagers and adults have exponentially increased, compared to the past. In my opinion,

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authorities are spending enough

amount

. It is not sufficient to satisfy,

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and future generations. The government should find a way to improve their funds and their spendings should boost twofold, compared to what they are doing now. To

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deposits in the municipal accounts, law enforcement agencies should increase the

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of fines for traffic rules, criminal offences and other activities. Which they can, in turn, spend on the well-being of youngsters and retired in the

community

.