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Some people prefer activities and lifestyles in hot climates while others prefer living in cold climates. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many individuals incline their interest for enjoying in warm
areas
 whereas some are fascinated with snowy
areas
 entertainment and stay. Enjoying time in hot
areas
 is considered beneficial in terms of vitamin enrichment and mental health improvement,
however
, accommodating at cold
places
 boosts immunity and
also
 makes people’s skin better.
Initially
, hot climate
areas
 usually have temperature ranges from 20 to 40 degrees Celcius, with a direct feeling of warmth passed by the Sun rays. These rays are usually rich in Vitamin D,
thus
 it is advised by the physicians to have sunbathe often in order to reduce the chance of diseases related to deficiency of
this
 Vitamin. Along with that, there are some psychological factors which let people choose warm
areas
 that days are bigger in the hot
places
, which gives opportunity to humans to work or enjoy more hours as compared to winter. On the other side, Snow and icy
places
 allure many individuals because of various reasons.
Areas
 with the extreme season, usually remain a good place for activities, competitions related to ice
such
 as ice skating. Apart from enjoyment reasons, cold weather is not only good in terms of nourishing the skin to refrain from allergic issues but
also
 for the good in terms of strengthening the immunity level. To exemplify: a questionnaire survey done by a journalist depicts that more than 55% of individuals prefer to visit cold
places
 as compared to hot
places
. In conclusion, both warm and cold
places
 have their own significance,
thus
 I believe should it is good to spend time in both of the
areas
 as per the convenience to enjoy all seasons given to us by nature.
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