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People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason for this? What are the effects on them?

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People
 are generally sleeping less compared to what they used to before.
This
 phenomenon is caused by overwork and it
results
 in general tiredness of the
body
 for the majority of populations nowadays. In recent years, the job-
markert
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market
 has been characterised by tough competition
hence
 the need to work more
hours
 than before. Everyone is almost always busy as deadlines have become tighter mainly due to
dramatic
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 rise in populations across the
devide
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divide
divine
.
Offce
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Office
hours
 have become longer to the extent that some actually sleep at the office because there is so much work to do.Closure of business
hours
 has
also
 been extended to suit these hectic schedules,
that is
,a normal working day now closes at 10pm compared to 5pm in the 1980s.
For instance
,a recently commissioned study in the United
states
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 in 2020 revealed that an average person now sleeps 4.4
hours
 lesser than before.
However
,
this
 has caused a series of impacts on the general well being of
people
,the major one being fatigue.When
people
 sleep less,it means the
body
 does not recover well because sleep rejuvenates the
body
 and mind.
This
results
 in generalised tiredness of the
body
,
subsequently
 leading to poor health and living standards.To add
on
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to
this
, fatigue directly impacts productivity negatively because when
people
 are exhausted, productivity significantly declines
resulting
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 in low income
hence
 an economic meltdown is inevitable.
For instance
,a study was carried out at a Texas construction company
involved
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hundred
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 builders, whereby half of them were allowed enough 8
hours
 of sleep,while the other half were deprived of
this
 necessity,all for five days.The
results
 were clear that those who had adequate sleep produced more
results
 and were generally lively than those who slept less. In summation, hectic work schedules are the major cause of sleep deprivation nowadays than in the past and the effects are general
body
 malaise and diminished production.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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