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Some people believe that children at school should learn art, others says it is a waste of time. What is your opinion?

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In today’s life, many people support the idea that
art
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 should be
compulsory
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 subject for all
children
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 at school whereas, others believe
that is
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 a distractor and wasting time. As far as I am concerned,
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the student
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student
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students
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 should learn
arts
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 in general because it helps them to think creatively as well as
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 themselves.
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 of all, many supporters
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 that idea believe that
art
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 may play a crucial role in shaping the personality of the students and
open
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 their minds. So, it might assist
children
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 to consider what kind of
art
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 is attracting them and
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, develop their congenital and mental health.
Furthermore
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,
Arts
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 make students creative.
For example
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, painting or visual
arts
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 bring multiple benefits to the child
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 as enhancement of imagination ability
that is
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 a necessary element in performing
arts
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.
On the other hand
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, Some critics support the idea that
art
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 is
such
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 a waste of time and students should be taught more valuable subjects
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 maths and chemistry. They think
art
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 is
distractor
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a distractor
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 and may stop progression on the other essential fields.
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, Some believe that if any of their
children
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 showed interest in
art
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, he or
she
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they
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 would concentrate more on that kind and would ignore the other subjects and
therefore
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, affecting their educational attainment.
In other words
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, if a student is talented in music or drawing, he will probably do his best to develop his skill regardless
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 other subjects. To sum up,
art
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 is an essential part
in
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 our lives. So,
children
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 should learn
art
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 in school for many advantages including
the
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personality shaping as well as
the
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creativity.
However
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, there are other aspects that have not been possible to consider.
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