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Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#city #buildings #support
The
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 number of
people
believe
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 that a
city
 should give more attention to
protect
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protecting
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old
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the old
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building
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buildings
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.
However
, some
people
 think a
city
 should replace
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the
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old
building
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buildings
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 with modern styles. From my point of view, I extremely agree with the statement that an old
city
 building should preserve by
people
 and government. In the essay, the specific reason will be narrated and
then
 give my own opinion on the matter. To being with, I strongly agree with a
city
 should preserve old
buildings
. Because, the old historic
buildings
is
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are
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 a good source of knowledge for young
people
 to study in the future and can integrate with modern style, and their design by using
old
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the old
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 building as an inspiration.
For instance
, in
Chiang
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the Chiang
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 Mai province of Thailand. There have lots of old temple
buildings
 and the government renovated
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them by
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by
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to
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integrate
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integrating
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 with modern style
then
 old
building
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buildings
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 and modern
building
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buildings
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 can be together. According to, by avoid destroy the old historic places.
Additionally
, Culture can be represented through
old
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the old
an old
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building
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buildings
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 in the transferred
city
. It attracts a number of
tourist
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tourists
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 from all over the world to learn about those
city
’s tradition and
culture
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cultures
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. Those
buildings
 can be
outstanding
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an outstanding
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 tourist
attraction
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attractions
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 to create a reputation for the country. Those
bringing
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bring
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 many
benefit
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benefits
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 for a country.
For example
, stimulate the economy and conserve traditional culture and old
buildings
 to survive for
new
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a new
the new
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 generation to study. In conclusion, I personally agree with
this
 viewpoint because it seems to me that the advantages of everyone should preserve old
buildings
for
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to
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survive
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 with modern era outweigh the disadvantages.
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