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Do you think that school newspaper should be given the absolute free speech with no censorship from faculty advisors.

Nowadays censorship is spreading among our education system,
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advisors
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 believe that they have
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 authority to examine their
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 newspapers.
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, according to my perspectives,
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 newspapers should be freed from
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advisors
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, since it has to be a remarkable publication of creative
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.
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,
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 is the hub of delivering and demonstrating a human with full of creativities, which can achieve numerous successes,
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 the future. That can be highly important to the development of a nation.
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, freedom is one of the main considerable factors to accomplish new products.
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,
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, who is having
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a desire
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 to be a reputed journalist or high-profile career in
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 sector, can obtain critical knowledge and experience by involving with
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 newspaper publications. That will be
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the perfect
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 platform among the peer groups to develop innovative ideas into
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.  
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, from the point of view of the schools, lectures or
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advisors
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 have a huge opportunity to rectify the immense talents, qualities, &
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weaknesses of the
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. As an example, in
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, teachers are treating and
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to
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all the
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 with
common
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 way of teaching methods. But, after seeing,
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 newspaper related work, which has
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 by
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 independently, teachers can come with a proper agenda or they can encourage collaborations
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particular
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student
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 who is having certain
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weaknesses
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 among the peer group. That will generate vast benefits to the student as well as college. In conclusion, I believe, giving pure
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independence
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independency
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independence
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 to the
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 to work on
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 newspaper will be developed creativity among the kids , as well as it is an opportunity 
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 teachers,
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advisors
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 to identify the expansive talents
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 a platform to take necessary actions to
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 curriculum.

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