In some people’s houses there is not only one television in their home,with each family member even having their own TV.

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In some people’s

houses

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there is not only

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television

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in their

home

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,with each family member even having their own

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more than

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television

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even each family member

having

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their own

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, that will cost a lot of money for family expenditure.

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Family

could use

these money

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to do something more useful ,

for

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example

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buy some fitting machine or fruit to get more healthy . If there are some under eighteen young people, in

this

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family ,they might be decode to do not know self-control that makes them waste

time

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used to be doing homework and too many

television

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make family members do not spend

time

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together, sometimes it could lead to

member

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family

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the family

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not close with any

one

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of them.

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watch

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television

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programs all the

time

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when he

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home

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, he will be

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to his family.

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some families

having

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more than

one

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set per

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, and children in

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family

also

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have self-control, they can still

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a good daily routine, not heavy expenditure for those families, It is a good thing to let people spend their tree

time

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, course they can study some cooking new meal, watch variety

show

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, talk show to relax. Study life

skill

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to improve themself. In conclusion, there are more disadvantages than advantages than realistic reasons, not more than

one

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in the

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could bring move benefit for these family.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

241 words

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In some people’s houses there is not only one television in their home,with each family member even having their own TV.

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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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