In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Students who
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high school  opt to work or travel for a year prior to starting university
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has been encouraged in some
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countries
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has many advantages as well as disadvantages. Starting from advantages, students get the
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extra money to be used for their university
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when they opt to work prior
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studies
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gives them an additional strength where they do not have to depend heavily on their parents.
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, the people who decide
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will not only get the opportunity to explore the world, but
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they will learn to respect the differences in different cultures. As an example,
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travel to
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east region from Europe will withness the heavy differences in society, education system, economic conditions and
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more between the two regions. When it comes to disadvantages, some of the young people can not
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the
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pressure
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which they had never experienced in school life. In
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case of scenario,
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depression
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individuals even before starting their university
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adventures
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through unfamiliar terrains could be
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and could end up with severe injuries or
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their own life. Hiking
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unfamiliar surfaces with less experience is one
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common dangers in
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travelling. In conclusion that we have discussed both advantages and disadvantages of encouraging working or travelling for young people who had
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completed
their high school
studies
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on what they chose and how they handle it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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