Today more and more tourists are visitin places where conditions are difficult , such as sahara desertor the Antartica. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the tourists who visit such places.
Nowadays visiting tough conditional places
such
desserts or glaciers which located in Antarctica are becoming extremely popular by travellers. Linking Words
Thus
, journeys have Linking Words
their
both advantageous and disadvantageous sides. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
essay will discuss both of them and give some Linking Words
evidences
to prove arguments.
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evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
To begin
with, some sort of Linking Words
people
are used to Use synonyms
be
bored really fast. Because Wrong verb form
being
this
feature is connected deeply with their characters that might Linking Words
came
from their origin and upbringing methods of their parents. So, Change the verb form
come
such
kind of group of Linking Words
people
always Use synonyms
want
to do incredibly challenging things to get energy, joy and meaning as well of their lives. Change the verb form
wants
For example
: as mentioned above, one type of their source of happiness could be taken from visiting places that have got heavy conditions to visit through. Linking Words
As a result
, coming across difficulties Linking Words
such
falling from ices or gaining to escape from Linking Words
polars
which live in Antarctica, feeling challenges and winning them are their primary goals to take pleasure.
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polar
Polaris
On the other hand
, these challenges have Linking Words
really
big contrary side too. Correct article usage
a really
Although
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,
it can be taken some pleasure from them, they can bring huge danger to that group of Remove the comma
apply
people
. For Use synonyms
instances
, having tours to Antarctica means that it Fix the agreement mistake
instance
clear
that Add a missing verb
is clear
people
are willing to be met straight away with polars in their wild conditions and it means that Use synonyms
although
, being near the death with killing by them or to roll from icebergs and stopping their heart.
To sum up, visiting places that have difficult conditions, have both good and bad sides. The Linking Words
advantageous
side Replace the word
advantage
that
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is that
people
can take Use synonyms
huge
amount of energy and relax Add an article
a huge
the
world which has beautiful nature or with finishing their lives.Change preposition
in the
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...