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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Global warming is the
next
 big disaster looming on our mother earth. Humans have achieved a lot of technological milestones. Ironically, we have now managed to reach the moon but have made our own planet inhabitable.
Hence
, there is no doubt that man-made activities are responsible for rising temperatures worldwide.
This
 has
further
 created problems
such
 as excessive melting of glaciers and ever-increasing sea levels.
Firstly
, the most important causes of global warming are deforestation and air pollution due to release of the greenhouse gases. The increasing human population throughout the world has strained our natural resources
such
 as fossil fuels.
This
 in turn leads to the exploitation of easily available alternatives like wood.
Secondly
, the unhindered release of greenhouse gases into the atmosphere has caused immense air pollution.
Consequently
,
this
 has led to a decrease in the ozone layer that protects us from harmful ultraviolet rays. It
also
 reduces the trapping of air in the earth's atmosphere and
thus
, prevents temperatures from soaring so high. Governments around the globe have racked their brains on many occasions so as to find a solution to
this
 problem. I think that world leaders should show a strong commitment to restrict their toxic gas emissions to the lowest possible level.
Also
, climate change activists like Greta Thunberg and other non-government organisations working towards afforestation should be encouraged and applauded. The leaders should be held accountable in case these goals are not completed from time to time. We as humans need to step up our efforts.
Otherwise
, we will be responsible for the extinction of our own human civilisation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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