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A new generation of entrepreneurs believe that privately funded space tourism will be the next exciting development in space exploration. How true do you think this is? How would space tourism affect space exploration as we know it today?

#generation #entrepreneurs #space #tourism #development #exploration
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People
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 always had a natural tendency to explore the unknown and push the boundaries of the known. Ever since we landed on the Moon, and
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travel
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 became an achievable task, our curiosity rose. It's only natural that entrepreneurs started seeing
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 tourism as the
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 big thing.
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travel
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 more and more and certain companies have been researching possible ways to send tourists to
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. It's only a matter of time before
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 activity becomes a reality for the population as a whole. To a certain extent since some
people
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 already explored ,
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 it's only natural that others will follow. Humans tend to be curious so it's not surprising that our society is willing to invest millions of dollars to be able to explore
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. How
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 new
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 will affect
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 exploration is a curious question. I believe there will be a lot of benefits. Since
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 tourism is becoming more famous a lot of
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 are raising questions about how safe
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 activity is. Businessmen are investing large sums of money in the
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 of new technologies that will make travelling in
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 easier and safer.
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 will enable
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 to
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 in
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 more and
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 will give scientists and researchers valuable data about human adaptivity and reaction to the no gravity abyss. There is no question that
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travel
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 will be expensive and only available for the wealthy part of our society.
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, if
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 new
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 becomes popular it might be possible to raise extra money that can be invested in scientific research.
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 will speed up the process of inventing new and enhanced technology and communication, resulting in speeding up the process of
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 exploration. In conclusion, it seems that
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 tourism is an inevitable
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. It seems that for ,now only the wealthiest will be able to afford it but if
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 new entertainment becomes popular it might have a positive effect on scientific research and its progress.
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