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Many people are doing their on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online.

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Lot
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 of individuals, these days, prefer to shop on
World
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the World
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 Wide Web platform. Variety of goods
as well as saving of
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, as well as saving of time,
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time
 are some merits of
this
 trend;
however
, lack of authenticity and
chances
 of fraud are some demerits which cannot be overlooked. Indubitably,
People
 get a lot of diverseness in terms of products. Since most of the companies often sell their product under one platform in the form of online shopping sites or apps, giving unlimited choices to
people
.
As a result
, they could save their money and spend it on other pursuits.
For instance
, had I not surfed, Myntra, a famous online shopping site, for purchasing
sport
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 shoes, I would not have got variety in terms of brands, material and so on.
Besides
this
,
people
also
 save their invaluable
time
 due to
above
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the above
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 development. The reason
being
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 they do not have to commute from one place to another for purchasing any item, and they could easily buy those things with the help of
internet
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the internet
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.
Moreover
, they do not have adequate
time
 due to
busy
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 work
schedule
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, thereby, rendering them enough
time
 for pursuing hobbies.
However
, online shopping lacks genuinity.
This
 is because sellers on
the
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online shopping platforms sometimes use cheap or substandard material in order to earn huge profits.
As a result
,
reputation
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the reputation
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 of these online shopping sites gets affected.
Moreover
, there are
chances
 of online
scam
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scams
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.
In other words
, sometimes hackers often steal the private bank-account details of the shoppers with the help of illegal methods. Resultantly, financial instability can be caused to individuals due to
this
. To explicate it, in a study conducted by an agency related to
Ministry
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the Ministry
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 of Information and Broadcasting, India, it was revealed that 70
percent
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 of
people
 were circumspect about online shopping due to
chances
 of online theft. In conclusion,
this
 essay has covered two aspects: merits of online shopping, which includes
wide
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 variety of choices as well as
time saving
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factor
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; whereas, its demerits, which consist of not only
chances
 of inauthentic products but
also
 online fraud, cannot be ignored
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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