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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern word, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Today, increasing illiteracy is certainly a topical issue, as so many countries are including
this
 pattern today. There are
two
 main
cause
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, and
two
 key impacts, which I will outline now. The major cause is probably
lack
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 of affordable
education
 facilities. The nearest
school
 might be found several miles away. It seemed
instead
 of going through the tiresome process of walking for long distances on a daily basis just
go
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 to
school
, many choose to stay at home. Another
well known
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 cause is many illiterate parents do not put much emphasis on the importance of
education
.
This
 is especially true in remote areas where many people in the older generation have not gone through formal
education
. Perhaps the main impact is on
the
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economic and social progress. People who have gone to
school
 or are well educated have the expertise and intelligence to make good investment decisions and drive the growth agenda of a nation. Illiteracy,
therefore
, hinders the development of the country. We can see
this
 clearly in Ethiopia, which
level
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 of
education
 is low. The other main effect is on social crime. Through
education
, a person can cultivate some civic sense and develop
behavior
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 patterns that are socially acceptable. In countries where the number of those who have not gone to
school
 is high, social crime levels
also
 tend to be high. In conclusion, lack of
education
 facilities and illiterate
family
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families
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 are
two
 factors contributing to illiteracy rates. To deal with
this
 problem, investment in
school
 infrastructure and the introduction of free
education
 are
two
 viable solutions.
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