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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern word, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Today, increasing illiteracy is certainly a topical issue, as so many countries are including
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 pattern today. There are
two
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 main
cause
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causes
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, and
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 key impacts, which I will outline now. The major cause is probably
lack
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the lack
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 of affordable
education
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 facilities. The nearest
school
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 might be found several miles away. It seemed
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 of going through the tiresome process of walking for long distances on a daily basis just
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 to
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, many choose to stay at home. Another
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 cause is many illiterate parents do not put much emphasis on the importance of
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.
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 is especially true in remote areas where many people in the older generation have not gone through formal
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. Perhaps the main impact is on
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economic and social progress. People who have gone to
school
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 or are well educated have the expertise and intelligence to make good investment decisions and drive the growth agenda of a nation. Illiteracy,
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, hinders the development of the country. We can see
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 clearly in Ethiopia, which
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the level
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 of
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 is low. The other main effect is on social crime. Through
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, a person can cultivate some civic sense and develop
behavior
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 patterns that are socially acceptable. In countries where the number of those who have not gone to
school
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 is high, social crime levels
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 tend to be high. In conclusion, lack of
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 facilities and illiterate
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families
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 are
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 factors contributing to illiteracy rates. To deal with
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 problem, investment in
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 infrastructure and the introduction of free
education
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 are
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 viable solutions.
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