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Some people think private school are better than public s school. What do you think and why

#people #school
In many countries , parents
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trend
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tend
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 to
enroll
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 their children in private
school
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schools
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 rather than public
school
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schools
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.There are certain merits I studying at high I
institution
 .its disadvantaged should not
overlooked
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.K
am
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 in opinion of
benfities
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benefits
 of public education sectors .
Firstly
 ,
Nowdays
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 Students can get various types of
educational
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the educational
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source
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sources
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 at private
school
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schools
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 or
college
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colleges
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 than
goverment
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government
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schools
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school
 or
college
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colleges
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such
 as online tuition, sports activities etc .I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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which
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 is not
easy
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 available in public
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schools
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school
.
other
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showing
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 interest
at
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high
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the high
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institution
 is less amount of pupils as compared
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public
school
 so they can get more attention of the teacher at
public
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School
. The other factor of the high demand of it is that children can get extra help with the facilities of one to one supports for
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 at private
school
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schools
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.
Secondly
 , I believe private
institution
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institutions
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 are
firmly
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 with rules and disciplines than
public
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the public
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school
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schools
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 which put positive aspects on kids on their learning skills .
Although
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institution
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institutions
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 are charging a huge amount of tuition
fee
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fees
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but
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it's
worth
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.
At
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 the end, the
benfities
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benefits
 of
private
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the private
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institution
 which they offer has
positives
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positive
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 aspects than negatives.
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