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In some countries, schools are open till late so that children can be looked after when parents are at work. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In the recent century, most of the
parents
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 go to work together in many countries. Due to
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 fact, they can not take care of their
children
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 during the day completely.
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,
children
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 can stay in
schools
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 till late.
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,
schools
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 can take care of them until their
parents
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 come home.
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 has its own pros and cons. Teaching is the most important job for
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.
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 the
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 job of
schools
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 is taking care of students, which is in the specific
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.
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time
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 could be extended more than usual.one of the positive points is that, Looking after students when their
parents
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 are at work help
children
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 to not be alone at home.
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, their
time
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 can be more useful, they can do their homework and play with their classmates.
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, one of my neighbours'
children
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 stay at school and use the
time
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 to do her homework. After coming home she can eat dinner and go to bed sooner than her peers. Because she used her
time
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 correctly.
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 article has some negative points either. When
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 can not see their
parents
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 as well as, usual, they can not tell their problems for their
parents
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 due to lack of
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 or connection. So, not only they can not solve some of their problems, but
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 they might get help from their peers and solve them in the wrong way.
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, I know a child, Which had spent most of the hours of his days in school. After a
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 he faced some emotional problems.Fortunately, his
parents
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 understood his lack of attention and help him to be improved by getting more off days and going on holidays. In conclusion,
children
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 need to be with their family for at least half of the day. If
parents
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 can not provide
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time
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, they should find a way to improve
children
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's situation by more off days.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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