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Some people say the Olympic Games do not have a role to play in the 21st century. To extent your agree or disagree?

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 play a vital role in human development, and no one can ignore their role in any time period counting from ancient greek to today's modern era. At present time I do not agree with the above statement that the
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 have nothing to do with the 21st century as in my opinion they had their role and continue to serve that part by providing healthy competition with the highest
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 standards and fair condition for every sportsman.
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games
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 provide the biggest platform for individuals as well as team
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 like volleyball ,football, running and personal
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 like disc through, weight lifting and a number of different
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. One important thing in the
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 is players play for the country they represent and achieve their own success by making new records or breaking the old ones. It provides a healthy environment for fair competition and the development of players as well as teams to their best. Opponents of the
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 think in today's time of covid-19, gathering
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 a big crowd is not wise as it gives rise to the spread of infection and cross-contamination with different strains.
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 should be avoided at all costs for the health of civilians and those sporting
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 can be organised later when it is safer to do it. For those ,people
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 and related activities are a waste of energy and funds which can be used for other more important issues. In conclusion, I would like to say that These
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 are not the disposal of money and efforts but it is a wise investment for healthy upcoming generations and setting up high
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 standards for the whole world.
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