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Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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 bar chart illustrates how the
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 of marriages and divorces changed in the USA from 1970 to 2000, while the
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 one compares the percentage of four different types of marital status in 1970 and 2000. It was clear that the
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 of marriages was much higher (about twice) than that of divorces throughout the whole period. To be more specific, the
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 of the former kept the same in 1970 and 1980, with 2.5
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 people married.
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 the
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 showed a downward
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, ending at 2
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 in 2000.
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, the
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 experienced some fluctuations. Only about 1
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 divorced, the
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 reached its peak at approximately 1.48
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 in 1980, followed by a falling
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. In the USA, most people chose to get married, despite a falling
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.
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, residents who never got married experienced an opposite
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, rising to 20 per cent. And the percentage of widowed and divorced was always very low, never over 10 per cent in both 1970 and 2000. Overall, the
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 of couples in the USA gradually decreased but the percentage of singles — never married and divorced — ascended.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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