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Write a passage about the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 choose to live in the
city
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in the
city
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. On the one hand, living in the
city
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 will help us have a convenient life.
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, we can live with the development's technology. It means that we will have more job opportunities and gain knowledge easily.
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, there are many services that are important in our life
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 as hospitals, transportation, post offices, schools and stores.
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, when I live in a
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, I can buy goods easily and have a good insurance service for the products that I bought. 
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages when we live in a
city
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. The
first
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 thing is the environmental problem. The increase of factories caused the environment's pollution. It has been destroying the atmosphere and many serious cancers for
people
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 who live in a
city
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. The
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 thing is society's vices
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 as drug addiction.
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, young
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 are easily spoiled by bad habits. If
people
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 use up all the money, they can't control themselves and even become robbers or murders.
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, a problem that many
people
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 living in the
city
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 have is heartlessness,
people
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 are too busy to care for others. In conclusion, there are good things as well as bad things about living in the
city
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.
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, I strongly believed that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. If
people
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 know how to live and enjoy their life, they can live everywhere.
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