Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only governments and large companies can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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The whole surroundings we are living in is not only resided by human beings
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other living and non-living creatures. Human beings possess the ability to explore and exploit natural resources for the sake of its life. Nowadays, some natural disasters occur caused by recklessly human intervention in nature. The governments and large groups will play
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prominent role to make a difference rather than an entity. Natural disasters
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as flooding and landslide are mainly caused by human behaviour, by
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, flooding is due to the disturbance on the natural water catchment.
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disturbance may be a result of excessive waste from households and the community. Landslide happens as a consequence of the loss of vegetation in steep or high areas.
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are more likely to do
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kind of action than entities.
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environmental damage may be caused by
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, the biggest role in improving
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the hand of governments and large companies. Because the government can make a rule to control groups or
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who possibly
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the environment.
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punishment for everyone who builds concrete in a critical area. The government
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could make a regulation to control the regional planning in order to avoid environmental disturbance. The establishment of the green areas
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can be made by governments or large
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can make a decision to preserve the environment. Start with simple actions like reducing, reusing, and recycling our waste. Indeed, we have to do that. But the impact of
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act is just for local changes. The impact is on another level if the change is made by the government or large companies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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