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In many countries, more and more men are staying at home to look after their kids when women work full time. What are the reasons? It is a positive or negative development?

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Contrary to the previous phenomenon prevailing in the past, several contributors, especially
females
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 become the main breadwinners, allowing
males
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 to take care of the family. Despite the drawback, prompted by the phenomenon more benefits should be mentioned. The shift in role comes primarily from
both
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 family and social aspects. On the family’s economic level, men and women can have access to the same educational opportunities. They
both
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 have an enlightened mind. On the social aspect,
both
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 women and men can have equal access to the same professional opportunities, to pursue the same career. Traditionally, women have been restricted to certain roles, they were often employed as secretaries or receptionists, while now a range of occupations is available to
both
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 sexes. Most companies pay more attention to individuals’ merit and ability.They will pay higher wages to people who are better performance at work. In my view, the phenomenon brings many benefits.
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, the
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 can accompany with their family more time,
females
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 can throw themselves into their work without scruple of family. It can strike a balance between family and finance.
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,
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 and
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 will not accept the onerous duty of the gender gap. The most important thing is people have a mutual understanding through the change of parental roles, they will more cherish each other. It benefits a closely-knit family.
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, even if the armed forces lose jobs, the whole family are not get thrown into financial trouble. In conclusion，family income and social progress result in the parental role shift.The trend for
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 and
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 is positive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Primary breadwinner
  • Gender roles
  • Primary caregiver
  • Child development
  • Emotional well-being
  • Parental leave policies
  • Work-life balance
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Inclusive policies
  • Financial strain
  • Economic roles
  • Societal norms
  • Prohibitively high
  • Diverse role models
  • Fostering equality
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