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Band 7

Developing countries should be encouraged to implement high tariffs to grow their local industries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is advisable for developing nations to impose high
tariffs
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 as a means of supporting the growth of their domestic industries.
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, I strongly disagree with
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 statement based on two primary reasons: reduced buyer interest and limited
product
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 availability. One key reason to disagree with the implementation of high
tariffs
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 is that it reduces consumers' interest in purchasing goods.
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 is because the rise in
product
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 prices may discourage consumers from making impulse purchases, especially for luxury or imported items. Higher prices can lead to a shift in consumer
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, pushing them to delay or cancel purchases altogether.
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, consumer demand may decline, potentially leading to stagnant or even negative economic growth in the region.
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, after some Southeast Asian countries imposed higher import duties on foreign electronics in 2018, the sales of premium smartphones and laptops significantly dropped, which slowed down the
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 growth of the tech retail sector.
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,
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 implementation will impact
product
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 availability in the market. When
tariffs
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 are introduced, corporations will be more selective in choosing which products to sell in order to meet market demands, especially when there is a risk that certain items may remain unsold.
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 cautious approach can lead to a reduction in variety and accessibility.
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, if imported food items become more costly
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tariffs
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, supermarkets might decide not to sell them anymore, and customers will have fewer choices. Over time,
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 may
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 reduce competition and innovation in the local market. In conclusion,
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 some believe high
tariffs
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 benefit local industries, they can
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 reduce consumer spending and limit
product
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 variety. For these reasons, I believe
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 policies may harm rather than help developing economies.

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Provide more examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
The essay presents clear reasons against high tariffs and includes relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tariffs
  • local industries
  • foreign competition
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • domestic demand
  • retaliate
  • trade wars
  • consumer choice
  • imported goods
  • foreign investment
  • technology transfer
  • protectionism
  • nascent businesses
  • sustaining businesses
  • national pride
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