In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is found that in a few countries the obesity problem outweighs while the stamina and immunity level seems to be flagged. Junk food and lack of exercise are the major contributing factors. One should follow the countermeasures for
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activity. To commence with, a healthy human body on
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average needs 2000 calories per day. An excessive intake of food leads to definite consequence damage to health.
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, many commercial advertisements on processed food have lured
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different age groups.
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and many more are just mouthwatering, but these junk foods jeopardize the body,
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a detrimental effect on it.
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, today’s hybrid vegetables are genetically modified and injected by
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which causes health
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like cancer, heart diseases, kidney dysfunction and many more.
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lifestyle has changed the habit pattern of human beings rigorously. Both Juvenile and
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seem to be addicted to electrical devices.
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of children are prone to video games
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many more. The sedentary job has
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deterred the body
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adults.To illustrate, high B.P, cancer, mental illness and many more cause insidious problems
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as obesity due to less physical activity.
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problem, law enforcement agencies should proscribe junk products, hybrid vegetables,
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and initiate awareness on
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diet and physical fitness programs
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as yoga, mindful meditation, a healthy diet. Children should involve more in sports activities while adults can engage themselves in gym and yoga studio and To summarize, one should always focus on adopting
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dietary regimen and indulging in sports activities and exercises.
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