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Some people think that only electric cars should be on roads by 2040. Do you agree?

#people #cars #roads
The usage of Eco car has
in creased
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 rapidly in recent years. Since the global warming issue has knocked on everyone's doors. Numerous people argued that by the year
of
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2040, people should not drive
fuel
cars
 anymore.
Therefore
, I agree with the statement and the reason will be revealed in
this
 essay. There are various reasons why we should use
the
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electric vehicles
instead
 of
fuel
cars
.
Firstly
, as an individual, it is a cheaper way of driving.
For instance
, individuals do not have to concern about the
raise
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 of gas's
price
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prices
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 which
seem
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 to be higher every single
years
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year
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. Whereas, they can alternatively
charging
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 their car at home where electricity
price
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prices
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 cost lower than
fuel
.
Secondly
, as
an
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 global citizen,
usage
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the usage
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 of electric
cars
 can help to
elliviated
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alleviate
 the global warming issue.
For example
, the burning of
fuel
 can cause Carbon Dioxide (CO2) to the atmosphere,
thereafter
, increasing the planet's temperature and
finally
 the earth become warmed. Even though
,
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 CO2 can be produced in many ways, the major one is
a
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transportation.
Consequently
,
electric
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the electric
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 car is one of the solutions that can improve our earth problems along with
create
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creating
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 a better air quality for
human
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humans
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 in our later generations. In conclusion, I strongly agree that by 2040 only electric
cars
 are allowed to be
drove
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driven
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 on the road.
Also
, I believe that if people
aware
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 of its advantages
such
 as a lower cost of electricity as well as its benefit for the planet, they will be using more electric
cars
 in the future.
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