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Some people think that the government should provide free public libraries in every town, while others think this is a waste of money because people can get access the information on the internet. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.

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Most individuals think governments should spend money to build free public
libraries
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 in each town.
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, others think governments should not squander money on public
libraries
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 because of the popularity of the
internet
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both points of view and give my own opinion. It is widely accepted that the government should build free
libraries
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 in each town. There are two main factors behind
this
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.
Firstly
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, there are some places which cannot connect to the
internet
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. That means the only way
people
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 can get information is from books and newspapers.
Secondly
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,
libraries
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 are not only a place for
people
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 to study or get information, it is
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 an area for
people
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 to socialize. Inside the
library
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 there are rooms for
people
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 to study together. At the same
time
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,time
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 it provides places for
people
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 to do some activities like art exhibitions.
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, others go quite the opposite way. Some individuals think the states
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 money to build public
libraries
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 is useless. The reason why they think like
that is
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 because of the development of the
internet
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. These
people
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 cannot believe there are still some places that do not have access to the
internet
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. These
people
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also
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 believe that using online resources is faster than going to the library, at the same time they don’t need to pay anything to publish or access information on the
internet
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. To sum up,
although
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 the
internet
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 is convenient and makes
people
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’s lives easier, I think the states should build public
libraries
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 to help
people
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 to keep reading habits.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public libraries
  • physical and digital resources
  • community hubs
  • educational and cultural activities
  • tailored information
  • literacy and lifelong learning
  • costly
  • urgent social needs
  • vast amounts of information
  • readily accessible
  • digitalization
  • under-utilized
  • inefficient use of public funds
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