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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is sometimes argued that
governments
 focus more concentrations on roads
instead
 of
railway
systems
. Personally, I completely agree with the idea that
governments
 should develop the underground rather than
road
 transportation. On the one hand, I agree that
road
 transportations are necessary for the public to commute in daily life.
For example
, the local resident can drive their car to everywhere they want to go.
However
, the
railway
systems
 cannot reach every place where you want to go. And
also
, tourists can rent a vehicle when they are planning a trip
instead
 of by public transportation. It is convenient for tourists to have a tour by car because they do not have to pick up their luggage for the whole trip.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
governments
 should have more budgets on
railway
systems
.
Firstly
, the
road
systems
 are good enough to let people commute every day.
By contrast
, it is time for the underground to refurbish, because it is too old to commute normally.
Secondly
,
railway
systems
 have their own routes,
thus
, it is suitable for people who have incidents suddenly.
This
 may prevent people from getting stuck in traffic.
Finally
, you do not have to worry about the fewer parking spaces and the high parking fees.
For example
, Taipei city is crowded, if you drive a car, it is hard for you to find a parking space or the parking fees are quite high. In conclusion,
road
 transportations are essential for the public, while spending more money on
railway
systems
 is the correct thing which
governments
 should do in recent years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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