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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is critical that young
students
 with a variety of
abilities
 and from different social backgrounds should mix with each other at school. in my opinion, I agree with that statement.
Hence
, in
this
 essay, I will try to prove 2 reasons I support
this
 idea.
Firstly
, there are
students
 with unique talents that are hard to recognize by the
teacher
 as there are a lot of
students
 in one class with different capacity of their own the
teacher
 cannot focus on one child to find his or her ability so if the kid has a lot of
friends
 with a different culture or the same culture it will not be hard by the
teacher
 to find out a children’s
abilities
.
For example
, a child who is extroverted, not hard to make
friends
 will be open in a class by solving the problem-based question, and
also
 his
friends
 will try to give him the confidence to answer a hard question
this
 way the
teacher
 can find the student’s
abilities
.
Secondly
,
students
 making a lot of
friends
 from different cultures at a young age will not have problems in the future.
Moreover
, getting a job or going for
further
 studies in foreign countries as he has already experienced his
friends
 being from different cultures so it won’t be hard to study and find jobs in international countries and accept people from different societies in his work or study place.
Lastly
 to conclude a young student’s talents can be exposed by his
friends
 and having more
friends
 from different cultures help him in working or studying in a non-native country. I agree with the young generation mixing with many different communities and helping in exposing his true
abilities
.
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