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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think this is a positive or negative social development?

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Learning a new language for an individual is enormously significant in
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 juncture to survive in the multilingual society,
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 there are sort of anticipations by the scientists that all humans
thereafter
 will speak the same language.
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, there are various detrimental effects for the community if they start using the same way of communication.
To begin
 with,
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 and foremost there would be a clear extinction of local culture if mankind adopt
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 similar way of verbal communication and
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 a new dialect for all, it is not always as easy as we humans used to think as
this
 phenomenon differs from an individual’s point of view that how easily the could learn. To exemplify, a friend of mine used to migrate to Canada where the majority of people communicate in French in
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 provinces, whereas he came across
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different obstacles to communicate with local people there
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.
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, developing
such
 social skills,
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also
 varies in terms of locations where one could easily sustain significantly in English speaking countries. Most of the candidates are flying abroad to complete their
further
 studies which
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 not possible without developing the accent skills more likely, speaking, reading, listening and writing.
In addition
 to
this
, knowing about multiple languages worldwide, local culture and customs could be easily spread all over the world and overseas masses would be familiar with other cultures too. To conclude, after undergoing the pros and cons of using a common way of communication it’s more obvious that the positive sides of
this
 approach overshadow the negative sides.
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  • enhanced
  • streamlining
  • diverse cultures
  • accelerate
  • exchange of information
  • erosion
  • linguistic diversity
  • dominance
  • unequal power dynamics
  • marginalizing
  • reinforce
  • economic benefits
  • reduced translation
  • diplomacy
  • acquisition
  • exacerbating
  • social inequalities
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