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Demand of food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes and what measures must be taken by international community to make sure the supply of food is enough for everyone?

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Food
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 is one of the most important life necessities in the world and day by day its
demand
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 is on the rise worldwide. The
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 reason for upsizing
food
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demand
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 is the growing global population ,followed by the habits of people in western countries for wasting readymade precooked as well as ready to use foods due to large portions of
food
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. Improper handling and
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 of
food
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 ingredients lead to early discard of that material in
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 world countries as those places lack
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 quality
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 with proper temperature and humidity control. In some ,instances enormous quantities of grains are stored in open spaces which are get destroyed or spoiled due to rain or winds.
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 ,there is a big gap between supply and
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 between the regions of the world ,for ,example the united states of America is the biggest producer of wheat while The African countries are the greatest user of it. Lack of self-independence on grains and
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 products makes those regions vulnerable to malnutrition and
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 shortages. For solving the global deficit of
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 ,there should be international institutes working for gathering data on the
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 and requirement of
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 supply and distribute them evenly over the earth making sure they are stored and kept in proper conditions of
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. They encourage the use of quality seeds with proper soil treatment to maximize crop
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 using the latest technologies available. In ,conclusion supply and
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 mismatch can be overcome by raising
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 by incorporating quality seeds and technologies for
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 as well as saving
food
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 by proper
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 and decreasing waste.
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