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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

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Children
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 are most energetic and elastic in their growing period and they will become what we will teach them during that period of maximum flexibility and try to take out best of it ,so I agree with involving them in activities they can learn as soon as possible because it will make their mind and body used to it and make them universal worker as an adult.
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children
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 in household chores gives them a sense of fulfilment as they can have satisfaction at the end of the day that they did some useful work for their family and house ,
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 it develops their working habits and starts paying attention to small details of their job which in the term ,develops their habit of detail-oriented work ,
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 they can get rewards in the form of gifts and money which can go to their piggy bank which in long run increase their sense for caring and saving money and they can use them when going for shopping for buying their toys and gadgets of their choice. Opponents of
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 working in households see
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 as child labour and parents taking away their childhood fun and activities which they suppose to do.For , their childhood is a fun and exciting time ,time to spend with other
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 and just good food and rest nothing else,but
children
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 getting bored with
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 monotonous rhythm. In ,conclusion engaging
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 in household chores gives positive meaning and works to do which satisfy their curiosity and provide them with physical work need to stay healthy and fit.
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