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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the
air
 pollutant factors in four highly developed countries:
China
, America, Japan, and Australia in the given period of 2021. It can be seen that
,
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 fumes released by transportation
was
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 the biggest
contribution
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 to
degradation
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the degradation
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 of
quality
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the quality
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 of
air
, following industrial and electricity generation, among
four
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 countries. At first glance, compared to the other nations,
China
's CO2 emission level peaked in all categories,
for instance
, the industry released toxic fumes peaked at 80
ppm
, following, transportation and electricity generated CO2 was almost lower than 10
ppm
, respectively. A similar trend can be shown in Japan, but its industry fumes were just over 40
ppm
, which almost halved
China
's figure. In terms of the USA, the contributing factor of
air
 pollution was fairly different, CO2 generation from vehicles was the largest just below
at
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60 pm, other two factors were equal at 30ppm and just below. Turning to Australia, where the
air
 pollution level was the lowest, all causing factors were just below 20
ppm
, which is almost equal
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 one-
third
 of
China
's features.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, china, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 3 times.
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