Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think it is essential for us to learn history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that studying
history
has nothing to do
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the future,I disagree.
However
,others say that it is
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crucial for us to research and development on
history
. In
this
essay,I will discuss both sides and give
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opinion. On the one hand,
history
reveals
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us
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the past and helps to
take
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decisions for the future generation.
Firstly
,for
youngsters
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it gives different outputs on the agriculture and resources that have been used in cultivating the land.
For example
,the ancient
sumerians
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in
mesopotamia
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around 3000 B.C. came with the rise of agricultural societies and property ownership and
this
consists of largely of land,livestock
such
as cattle and grain.
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helps and gives
the
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guidance for the younger generations and follow the techniques that
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been used by ancient people.
Secondly
,ancient civilizations
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attributes
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different cultures and origins of gods. To illustrate
this
,in
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chinese
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mythology,the creation of writing attributes
the
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sages and gods that are used for communication.
Moreover
,
this
helps
community
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the community
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to learn how to worship gods and follow religious methods.
Lastly
,there are great leaders and freedom fighters who fought for their countries.
This
anticipates youth to participate in politics and follow the rules that are given by the governing bodies.
Furthermore
,it has
also
helped in globalisation ,rates of growth of population,knowledge and literacy programs and environmental degradation.
Nevertheless
,others opine that studying
history
is the
hard
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ships
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in learning because of the various dates and years ,ages and civilizations. They believe that other subjects
such
as
,
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science and technology , business studies and communications are more
knowledge based
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for future employment opportunities.
However
,schools and parents are
also
giving
the
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guidance
and
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encouraging their child's decision and avoiding
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the positives of taking
history
as a subject. To conclude,
although
history
has so many benefits public are avoiding
because
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of different perspectives. I believe
history
has more outcomes than drawbacks because of
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scientific reasons.
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