Governments give lot of support to artists , eventhough some people thnk it is waste of money that could have been spent somewhere else. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Every nation feels proud

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when his/her

artist

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is known in different parts of

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, which is why the states aid

such

natural talented

people

with finances during their struggle time. While

these kind

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of

people

undoubtedly can eradicate poverty in their family with their talent,

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believe that taxpayers money could be better

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on more

necessitial

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necessity

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aspects -as in Education , Health and Employment. To commence with , many a man believes that it is

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of the

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to give monetary assistance to the amateur talents . To elaborate, the less-skilled talents

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the opportunity of gaining skills from the certified coach because of the low financial sources.

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, with the modest finances given by the

government

, the talents hiding in poor families, get a chance to pull themselves out of poverty , by

practicing

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incessantly with passion and eventually shining like a star. Who can forget ' Neha

kakkar

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' the great Indian singer , who belonged to a poor background, yet with her talent and training under famous singers , she won the National singing competition and now is ruling the hearts of

indians

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with her melodious voice?

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the help of the states to the artistic

people

, they can be deprived of what they deserve , owing to the lack of resources. Notwithstanding

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, the opponents including me oppose

this

by saying that the actual number of talented artists is quite low ,

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it is of no use wasting money on the huge population

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the name of encouraging art. Rather, a lot of other sectors require urgent attention.

Firstly

, the dream of zero

illeteracy

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illiteracy

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by every

government

can only be fulfilled by opening new schools in rural areas , ensuring that

people

are aware

about

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the importance of education and quality teachers should be appointed at

government

schools . All these projects need investment.

Besides

, a nation could be productive only if the residents are hale and hearty ;

however

, the inflation in the prices of medical treatment and medicines is acting as a hindrance in

this

field.

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had better provide some schemes to the

people

for free treatments.

Lastly

, despite having a lot of skills and degrees in their respective areas, the youth of the undeveloped nations is stumbling upon pillars to post in the quest of the job. The onus of employing

such

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workforce lies on the shoulders of the

government

. To conclude,

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the funds provided by the higher authorities can give direction to the life of a penurious youngster,

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would like to reiterate my opinion by saying that making a country literate, healthy and employed is far much crucial than improving the art.