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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in the free times and have health probles as a result. Why do many working people do not get enough exercise? what can be done about these problem?

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working people are not getting
exercise
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 at
work
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 as well as in their free
time
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 and without proper diet and
exercise
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 end up in health issues. I am going to elaborate on some of the reasons behind the lack of
exercise
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 and probable solutions in detail in the essay. Nowadays the majority of workplaces involve computers in their
work
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 so no more physical
work
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 is left for employees,and use of computers make their
work
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 sedentary with no room for
exercise
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 during
work
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 hours and if there is lack of diet control
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 there will be health issues sooner or later. ,
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 workers used to play games on mobile or smartphones during their free
time
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 so they miss another opportunity for workouts. use of vehicles for commuting
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 takes away another workout chance in the form of walking or cycling. solution for
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 is to create opportunities or chances for
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 by allowing them extra
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 for reaching job by walking or cycling ,getting in sports with friends and families when they get-together in parks or use break
time
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 for active sports rather than games on mobiles. job places can arrange sports competitions between workers groups to encourage them to stay active, in , conclusion with the active participation of workers only they can stay healthy by adopting a healthy diet and small but more frequent
exercise
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 regimes whenever possible like walking, playing games,football ,volleyball,cycling or any type of brisk physical activity to maintain energy level as well as stay fit and healthy.
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