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ome people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#ome #people #choices
In
this
 modern world, due to the global trend, some
people
 think that we have too many
choices
 that we can choose.
This
 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement and will explain why.
First
 of all, it is notable that global trade and technological development is the main reason why
people
 have many
choices
.
People
 can go to foreign countries easily and can find various kinds of food, products from different countries. Those are all because of the global market and transportation technical development.
For example
, when we go to the supermarket, even though the same food, there are different makers from different countries. Even for working ,place we can have many
choices
such
 as work at home country or foreigner country, working at home or outside. It is not different for
people
 to think of more than one choice in a few seconds in
this
 modern world.
Secondly
,
people
’s imagination is
also
 a big reason why we can many
choices
. Nowadays, children have been taught to have flexible thought and creative ideas whereas they can create a lot of things and different possibilities.
This
 means that
people
 can have infinity possible, and they can create various
choices
 by themselves.
Furthermore
, in recent years running a business is not a difficult thing, creating a new business or devising new products can
also
 be possible. In the future, there will have uncountable
choices
 be created. In conclusion, today
people
 can have a lot of
choices
 is because of global trade and technical development whereas imagination is
also
 a big effect that can create uncountable
choices
.
People
 can have various kinds of
choices
 and any
choices
 can be possible.
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