You would like a temporary job working in a summer camp which runs sport and outdoor activities for children and young people next summer. Write a letter to the organisers of the summer camp. In your letter: •Explain what sort of job you would like to do. •Describe your personality. •Say what experience and skills you have.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Shweta Bhat, a student at Conestoga College. I am writing

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letter regarding the temporary work in your summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people. I was going through your website and saw various part-time job opportunities for students. Among those, I want to work as a Cook. Since

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my childhood I always loved to cook food for others and that gave me a sense of satisfaction.

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, it might sound silly and funny,

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with spices and taste is one of my hobbies. Talking a little about my background, I have completed my diploma in Cookery from SNDT College and I have 1 year of experience working as a chef at the Taj Hotel in India.

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my cooking skills, I am a patient and honest person. I am very much interested in

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temporary job and I would appreciate it if you could give me a chance at your summer camp. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you.

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structure

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve cohesion further.

response

Try to expand slightly on how your experience directly relates to working in a summer camp.

greeting closing

You included a clear greeting and closing, which makes the letter feel complete and courteous.

response

The letter provides a thorough response to the task, covering all the points requested.

tone

The tone of the letter is suitable for a job application, portraying professionalism and enthusiasm.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

175 words

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