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some people believe that parents should teach their students to be good citizens ,however believe that school should do this .Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #parents #students #citizens #school
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It is considered by some that it is
parents
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' responsibility to teach their kids how to behave,while others think it is
schools
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' job.In my opinion,I believe that each side should take a part in
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 task, and not only to be confined to one of them,so the children grow up with great moral principles. On the
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 hand,
parents
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 are the only ones accountable for their kids,and they must provide for them everything they need,not only financially,but
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 emotionally and most importantly they must raise their children on good morals behaviours,and to make sure that they apply those rules
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 on themself
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so that they become the model that their child looks for,
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, if,
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,a kid hears a bad word from his fathers and said it the
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 day to one of his friends at school,the principal will call for his
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 and they will be questioned about the source of the kid's language,and the will be in a bad image.
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,some people think that
schools
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 should take a role in raising students,to illustrate, children spend a lot of time at school,around one-
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 of their day,which does not leave them much time with their
parents
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,that already come exhausted after work,
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,
schools
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 should dedicate a portion of classes time to guide students a teach them good morals,
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,how to respect each other and how To sum up,Its
parents
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' duty and responsibility when it comes to the behaviour of their child,
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schools
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 are educational institutions and moral principles must be learnt by every kid,
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,they
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 should take a part in teaching kids good morals.
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