In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Our mothers and fathers always say that; we were extremely fit in our twenties.
Also
old Add a comma
,Also
people
always live longer, especially who
was born before Correct pronoun usage
those who
Correct article usage
the 1950’s
1950’s
. With Fix apostrophe usage
1950s
a
time, the average weight of Correct article usage
apply
people
was increased and their levels of health and fitness were decreased. Working conditions
and preferences of
fast Change preposition
for
food
are caused these
. Solution Change preposition
by these
of
these problems Change preposition
to
are
encouraging Change the verb form
is
people
to prefer healthy foods
and supporting them to sport
.
Problems of Add an article
the sport
these issue
start with, old working Change the determiner
this issue
these issues
conditions
were considerably different than
today’s working Change the preposition
from
conditions
. Today people
spend too much time in front of computer
and because of Add an article
the computer
a computer
that
they don’t make physical activities. Add a comma
,that
However
, old people
mostly work the
jobs that Correct article usage
apply
requires
physical activities Change the verb form
require
such
as working in rural and taking care of animals. Secondly
, nowadays, fast foods
are easy to achieve and very practical. Everyone prefer
fast Change the verb form
prefers
food
rather than healthy foods
. The number of burger restaurants are
considerably more than salad restaurants.
Change the verb form
is
Solution
of these begins with, Correct article usage
The solution
people
should be encouraged by legal authorities to do sport. Legal authorities should create more parks with fitness equipment. On the other hand
, finding healthy food
should be easy. There should be healthy
snacks shop. Correct article usage
a healthy
For example
, instead
of bread restaurants may use lettuce for Add an article
a hamburger
the hamburger
hamburger
. Fix the agreement mistake
hamburgers
This
may change people
preferences.
To conclude, working conditions
and preferences of fast food
are big problems of people
’s weight and health conditions
. We can solve these with
supporting Change preposition
by
people
to prefer healthy foods
and do more sports.Submitted by ezgikocak93 on
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