In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Our mothers and fathers always say that; we were extremely fit in our twenties.

Linking Words

Also

Add a comma

,Also

show examples

old

people

Use synonyms

always live longer, especially

who

Correct pronoun usage

those who

show examples

was born before

Correct article usage

the 1950’s

show examples

1950’s

Fix apostrophe usage

1950s

show examples

. With

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

time, the average weight of

people

Use synonyms

was increased and their levels of health and fitness were decreased. Working

conditions

Use synonyms

and preferences

Change preposition

for

show examples

fast

food

Use synonyms

are caused

these

Change preposition

by these

show examples

. Solution

Change preposition

show examples

these problems

are

Change the verb form

show examples

encouraging

people

Use synonyms

to prefer healthy

foods

Use synonyms

and supporting them to

sport

Add an article

the sport

show examples

. Problems of

these issue

Change the determiner

this issue

these issues

show examples

start with, old working

conditions

Use synonyms

were considerably different

than

Change the preposition

from

show examples

today’s working

conditions

Use synonyms

. Today

people

Use synonyms

spend too much time in front of

computer

Add an article

the computer

a computer

show examples

and because of

that

Add a comma

,that

show examples

they don’t make physical activities.

However

Linking Words

, old

people

Use synonyms

mostly work

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

jobs that

requires

Change the verb form

require

show examples

physical activities

such

Linking Words

as working in rural and taking care of animals.

Secondly

Linking Words

, nowadays, fast

foods

Use synonyms

are easy to achieve and very practical. Everyone

prefer

Change the verb form

prefers

show examples

fast

food

Use synonyms

rather than healthy

foods

Use synonyms

. The number of burger restaurants

are

Change the verb form

show examples

considerably more than salad restaurants.

Solution

Correct article usage

The solution

show examples

of these begins with,

people

Use synonyms

should be encouraged by legal authorities to do sport. Legal authorities should create more parks with fitness equipment.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, finding healthy

food

Use synonyms

should be easy. There should be

healthy

Correct article usage

a healthy

show examples

snacks shop.

For example

Linking Words

instead

Linking Words

of bread restaurants may use lettuce for

Add an article

a hamburger

the hamburger

show examples

hamburger

Fix the agreement mistake

hamburgers

show examples

This

Linking Words

may change

people

Use synonyms

preferences. To conclude, working

conditions

Use synonyms

and preferences of fast

food

Use synonyms

are big problems of

people

Use synonyms

’s weight and health

conditions

Use synonyms

. We can solve these

with

Change preposition

show examples

supporting

people

Use synonyms

to prefer healthy

foods

Use synonyms

and do more sports.

ezgikocak93

Jan 20, 2022

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

246 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter ◦ describe the problem you had with the tickets ◦ say why you were unhappy with the staff ◦ suggest what action the train company should take
I hope this message finds you well. I'm writing to express the unpleasant situation that happened to me at the train station. I bought 3 tickets on 23 July for a trip to my family in Japan on 30 July, however, when I arrived at the station the staff told me that I was not able to catch the train in disrespectful way. Moreover, they did not attempt to clarify the situation to me which is terrible behaviour. Additionally, I want some help with other staff but they were busy and it seems that they have more commitments to do. Finally, as you are the person who is responsible for the training station I ask you to provide professional training to the staff to improving their services and personal characteristics. I hope to change my expired tickets to new ones and send me a real apology letter to make me feel satisfied and happy. Thank you for your time I hope I was clear and positive. I'm eagerly waiting for your response.
6
band
Your friend invited you to his/her birthday, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you cannot go explain why you didn’t contact him/hear sooner suggest another time and place to meet
Thank you for inviting me to your birthday bash. Unfortunately, I will not be able to join as my parents are coming to visit me and I am going to pick them from the Vancouver internation airport on 6th January that is same day you are holding birthday party.
7
band
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
the conventional model of visiting ordinary sites has commenced shifting, with a growing number of visitors opting for travelling to tough condition destinations like the Sahara Desert, the Antarctic or even Everest Mountain, a trend popular in the world of tourism. in this regard, this choice offers them some merits as well as brings them some troubles. in this essay, I will inspect the both positives and negatives brought about by this trend.
7.5
band
All large companies should provide sports and community facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The initiative of allowing every major business to serve local inhabitants by providing sports and community equipment has become controversial in the present day. Despite some positive aspects of this idea, I would argue that serving citizens is the responsibility of the government and companies may not be appropriate to carry out this mission due to some rationales.
7
band
Earlier technology developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some assert that preceding technological advancements yielded more substantial benefits and transformations in the lives of common people in contrast to contemporary innovations. I completely disagree with the notion as recent breakthroughs possess an equivalent, if not superior, potential to reconfigure lives and societies, challenging the notion of diminishing impact.

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Your friend invited you to his/her birthday, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you cannot go explain why you didn’t contact him/hear sooner suggest another time and place to meet

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

All large companies should provide sports and community facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Earlier technology developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?