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Some people say the government should give the health care the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend the taxpayers’ money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It’s an argument between two groups that the Government should allocate taxpayer money for
health
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care
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 rather than spending on other important priorities
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 as education , transport and park development. I completely disagree with the statement.
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 essay will describe my view with valuable supporting points .
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 of all , medical
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 is very important for all the individuals in the world. All the pupils will definitely face some kind of
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 challenging emergency situations in their
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, Government support the healthcare team by providing them with adequate necessities.
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 , in the Covid19 pandemic entire world was under medical emergency, only the
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-worker team played the role to survive one other
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 by risking their own
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.
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,
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care
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 society has the key role for once
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 , it should be taken
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 of properly .
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 , in the recent pandemic for more specification countries like India suffered a lot with lack of oxygen supply to the emergency patient and figure lot of young deaths .
This
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 situation happened because of no proper budget allocation for the
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care
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 team On contrary, even other departments like Education, transportation and other faculties are equally important. The administration should allocate the budget
accordingly
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.
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, the education system is important for all
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 which determines one future
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 . In conclusion,
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care
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 workers play an important role in all individual
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. All the departments are equally important but the medical field should prioritise among all the Government should allocate the budget accord to the necessity

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