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The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global environmental pollution has become the greatest trouble of the world, each and every nation trying to remediate
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 issue by applying one or another
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 from the increasing price of the fuel to penalising the environmental abusers. I Will elaborate
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 on the possibilities of eradicating the problem,by finding the root cause of the issue. Global environmental pollution is largely created by greenhouse gases which come from burning fossil
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 from
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 and combusting engines of cars and different vehicles. Another pollutant is plastic coming from packaging
industries
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 and disposable plastic items , In ,addition radioisotopes ,pesticides and industrial chemicals are added to the water and soil erosion when disposed of without pre-treatment or misuse of the products in the farming
industries
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 is a global issue ,so the
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 requires efforts from governments of all the countries rather than blaming each other.The
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solution
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 is -turning towards renewable sources of energy like solar,wind and water energy and reducing sources of greenhouse gases by encouraging people to use public transport like buses,subways,and trams, limiting the use of fossil
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 and high penalties for non-compliance.Other pollutants like plastic and chemicals can be controlled by reducing use, reusing and recycling them whenever and wherever possible,eco-friendly packaging solutions.
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 ,increasing fossil
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 prices will increase inflation and make the life of middle-order families much harder. in,conclusion the World's environmental problem is gigantic and needs time tested, large-scale,and globally accepted and implacable
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 which can sustain the world's economy without touching the price-limits of fossil
fuels
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 and
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,save the environment.
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