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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV shows, advertisements, fashion and follow the same brands. To what extent the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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At present time the world is becoming a global village due to advances in technology ,citizens can have access to all kinds of food ,entertainment and trends in fashion and design at each and every corner of the Earth. people are divided on
this
 development as positive for some and negative for the rest of the individuals. I am going to elaborate on the pro's and cons of globalisation and ,
personally
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 I will say its positive development for humanity. Globalisation has made it possible for citizens of any country can enjoy the dishes of any
countries
 cuisine, wear clothes of any world-famous designer ,follow entertainment programmes of any nation with advertisements as well as world-famous brands of shoes,cars ,and other gadgets , in ,addition online shopping enables to get any product across the globe at fingertips. Online shopping platforms like Amazon,Alibaba and eBay make the shopping experience the same for everyone , with no class difference whether you are living in
third
 world
countries
 or in developed
countries
 like Canada and USA as you have to pay capacity.
This
 had declined in immigration and to some extent in travel for shopping as customers can buy from the comfort of home
then
, why should travel for it ,
on the other hand
 , it negatively works on small traders and local merchants as that global giants can offer more discounts and provide better service than those shoppers,which can contribute to local unemployment and loss of revenue for local municipalities. In ,conclusion technology upgrades cut down the distance between its citizens as the internet and smartphones bring them together but it has increased the financial gap between companies as the bigger companies getting bigger while the smaller
countries
 going smaller still I will say it's a positive development for civilisation.
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  • cultural homogenization
  • interconnected world
  • dilute unique cultural identities
  • global media
  • dominance of multinational corporations
  • cultural imperialism
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • global products
  • traditional cultural values
  • innovation and creativity
  • exposure to global ideas
  • local creativity
  • traditional practices
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