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Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies. How does competitiveness affect individuals? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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competitiveness
 is pervasive, and
people
 are likely to encounter it in almost every aspect of their lives.
Although
competitiveness
 sometimes enables
people
 to perform better, it
also
 results in
high
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 level of pressure for
people
 who are competitive. I believe it has an adverse impact on us because it makes us become low self-esteem.
One
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 the one hand,
competitiveness
 makes us achieve better performance.
Competitiveness
 enables
people
 to set up a meaningful goal, enabling them to pursue it through
hard working
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, overcoming difficulties and pushing their limits. They can,
therefore
, obtain better outcomes and performance.
For example
, most athletes are required to be competitive during training, because they need to push their body limits to be the winner in competitions.
On the other hand
, excessive exposure to
competitiveness
 brings
people
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 level of pressure.
People
 always want to win others in a competitive environment, and
hence
, they pay more attention to
opponent’s
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 achievements rather than caring about their own ones.
People
 are likely to become sad and frustrated when they did not do better than them, even though they are already successful in their field. In the
long run
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competitiveness
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 may results in
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 pressures.
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 is detrimental for
people
 because it leads to low self-esteem. Nobody can always be a winner, and too many competitions around
forces
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 us to be competitive. When we lose,
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 inferior to others or even be left behind
of
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 life. In a long run, it is not healthy
to
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 our physical and
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mental
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metal
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 well-being, which may
result
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 low self-esteem. In conclusion, even though
competitiveness
 encourages
people
 to pursue better performance, it sometimes
also
 overloaded
people
 with pressure, which could be harmful
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people
’s well-being.
Therefore
,
competitiveness
 has a damaging impact on
people
.
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